Hi Gideon, Or should I say yang blood.
There is something called soft skills. A very vital ingredient for success in today's world.
If you have good soft skills, it will enable you to;
1. Have good presentation skills
Your subject should just introduce the content of your letter, it should not be the letter!
Think about what it is you want your mail to achieve.
2. Use polite language
You are seeking for some place to explore your field? You think my company is just a place ? Hell, this place pays my bills!!! It may not be important to you but it is to me.
3. Not assume that we know what you are looking for
We know you need an internship or a job. Ask for one clearly, in life you only get what you ask/negotiate for, not what you deserve.
So you have all these papers but you come across as being this sloppy? As an employer, I won't allow you to touch any of my servers or routers. Period.
I am telling you all this the same way I'd advice my small bro. Am not just flaming you.And it is pure gold by the way. I should charge you for this advice! I hope utasaidika.
Watoto wa siku hizi??!!!!